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Saturday, April 9, 2011

Two O'Clock

Day 9 April P-A-D prompt:  Write a time of day poem
NaPoWriMo Day 9 prompt:  Write a poem backwards.  Start by writing out an old saying that takes the form of a declarative statement.

Two o’clock
Surrounded by
Ghostly presence
Haunting emptiness
Getting up
Sitting down
Walking in circles
Searching
Holding on to
The promise of healing
From painful farewell…
It doesn’t come…
Three o’clock…
Keep watching the clock
Pain will soon ebb
Just hold on…four o’clock
To the promise…
Time heals all wounds.

G.K.Bostic - 4/9/11

25 comments:

  1. Such a poignant poem. It's a wonderful piece.

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  2. Thank you thingy...I really appreciate that. :)

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  3. I can feel the anxiety in this very well.
    Excellent combining both prompts, Gloria.

    Pamela

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  4. elegant, welcome in.
    Happy Rally.

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  5. Thank you Pamela. I love these challenges. They really give my muse the itch. ;)

    Thanks Jingle, and thank for inviting me! :)

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  6. Gloria, thanks for visiting my blog. This is my first time visiting yours. I will visit again. Your piece resonates with me right now. Sometimes the healing doesn't come! Sad, but true.

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  7. Yes, I agree with Flaubert in the sense of anxiety....the poem itself " paces". The blog is absolutely beautiful. So lovely to meet you!

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  8. Nice crafted combination ... always a challenge ... often like combining two different worlds. :-)

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  9. What a surprise ending. Wonderful poem. I know it feels like this when you are waiting for the pain to stop.
    http://judyidliketosay.blogspot.com/2011/04/809-pm.html

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  10. Straight from the heart, this one. Great words.

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  11. The hours ticking by structures this really well, great stuff.

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  12. 'Time heals all wounds.'... it's so building after things that have recently happened to me... I somehow feel like crying... Love your poem!

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  13. How our moods and perspective change with each hour!

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  14. Liked the way you have divided in hours the charge of nursing a heart that is hurt. Good work!

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  15. Wonderful the way you combined the prompts.

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  16. Such patience in this piece--by 4 o'clock I'm usually pulling my hair out! I love the way you worked the prompts for this one. Thanks for sharing this one for the rally!

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  17. That was mad cool!!! good job!
    Enjoy the rally!
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  18. Sometimes all you can do is wait for time to pass, the healing is done in secret and then you look for that old pain to find it gone.

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  19. yes
    sometimes time is
    too fast for feelings
    sometimes too slow

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  20. Wonderful words strung together to create a longing...for the sun to come out again. Very nice.

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  21. I like how you worked backward from an old saying, a proverb, but made it your own, just with that little word "promise". The speaker isn't healed yet, and you capture that uneasy feeling well. Very effective, understated, and moving.

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  22. Time wins at the end...no matter in good or in bad...
    Great write

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  23. a few hours can make a lot of difference huh? :)

    Rally Week 41 - My Poetry

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  24. awww nice piece...kudos to you Gloria

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