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Saturday, April 9, 2011

Two O'Clock

Day 9 April P-A-D prompt:  Write a time of day poem
NaPoWriMo Day 9 prompt:  Write a poem backwards.  Start by writing out an old saying that takes the form of a declarative statement.

Two o’clock
Surrounded by
Ghostly presence
Haunting emptiness
Getting up
Sitting down
Walking in circles
Searching
Holding on to
The promise of healing
From painful farewell…
It doesn’t come…
Three o’clock…
Keep watching the clock
Pain will soon ebb
Just hold on…four o’clock
To the promise…
Time heals all wounds.

G.K.Bostic - 4/9/11
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25 comments:

  1. MaggieApril 9, 2011 at 4:57 PM

    Such a poignant poem. It's a wonderful piece.

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  2. GloriaApril 9, 2011 at 5:02 PM

    Thank you thingy...I really appreciate that. :)

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  3. flaubertApril 9, 2011 at 5:30 PM

    I can feel the anxiety in this very well.
    Excellent combining both prompts, Gloria.

    Pamela

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  4. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallApril 9, 2011 at 5:40 PM

    elegant, welcome in.
    Happy Rally.

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  5. GloriaApril 9, 2011 at 6:04 PM

    Thank you Pamela. I love these challenges. They really give my muse the itch. ;)

    Thanks Jingle, and thank for inviting me! :)

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  6. MaryApril 9, 2011 at 6:51 PM

    Gloria, thanks for visiting my blog. This is my first time visiting yours. I will visit again. Your piece resonates with me right now. Sometimes the healing doesn't come! Sad, but true.

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  7. Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik (PKP)April 9, 2011 at 8:38 PM

    Yes, I agree with Flaubert in the sense of anxiety....the poem itself " paces". The blog is absolutely beautiful. So lovely to meet you!

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  8. AnonymousApril 9, 2011 at 8:59 PM

    Nice crafted combination ... always a challenge ... often like combining two different worlds. :-)

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  9. Judy RoneyApril 9, 2011 at 9:22 PM

    What a surprise ending. Wonderful poem. I know it feels like this when you are waiting for the pain to stop.
    http://judyidliketosay.blogspot.com/2011/04/809-pm.html

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  10. anthonynorthApril 9, 2011 at 11:51 PM

    Straight from the heart, this one. Great words.

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  11. JW_FirthApril 10, 2011 at 12:16 AM

    The hours ticking by structures this really well, great stuff.

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  12. AnonymousApril 10, 2011 at 1:55 AM

    'Time heals all wounds.'... it's so building after things that have recently happened to me... I somehow feel like crying... Love your poem!

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  13. AnonymousApril 10, 2011 at 2:28 AM

    How our moods and perspective change with each hour!

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  14. Nonsensefile!!April 10, 2011 at 2:40 AM

    Liked the way you have divided in hours the charge of nursing a heart that is hurt. Good work!

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  15. AnonymousApril 10, 2011 at 5:34 AM

    Wonderful the way you combined the prompts.

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  16. AnonymousApril 10, 2011 at 11:00 AM

    Such patience in this piece--by 4 o'clock I'm usually pulling my hair out! I love the way you worked the prompts for this one. Thanks for sharing this one for the rally!

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  17. AnonymousApril 10, 2011 at 3:02 PM

    That was mad cool!!! good job!
    Enjoy the rally!
    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/

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  18. AnonymousApril 10, 2011 at 6:39 PM

    Sometimes all you can do is wait for time to pass, the healing is done in secret and then you look for that old pain to find it gone.

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  19. Madeleine Begun KaneApril 10, 2011 at 10:41 PM

    Powerfully emotional!
    Mad Kane

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  20. lucychiliApril 11, 2011 at 3:26 AM

    yes
    sometimes time is
    too fast for feelings
    sometimes too slow

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  21. AnonymousApril 11, 2011 at 4:55 PM

    Wonderful words strung together to create a longing...for the sun to come out again. Very nice.

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  22. Mr. WalkerApril 11, 2011 at 10:37 PM

    I like how you worked backward from an old saying, a proverb, but made it your own, just with that little word "promise". The speaker isn't healed yet, and you capture that uneasy feeling well. Very effective, understated, and moving.

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  23. AnonymousApril 12, 2011 at 12:13 AM

    Time wins at the end...no matter in good or in bad...
    Great write

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  24. Vinay Leo R.April 14, 2011 at 10:36 AM

    a few hours can make a lot of difference huh? :)

    Rally Week 41 - My Poetry

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  25. AnonymousApril 14, 2011 at 4:42 PM

    awww nice piece...kudos to you Gloria

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